【完全版】英作文を添削してほしいです。 My goal is speaking English with for…

【完全版】英作文を添削してほしいです。 My goal is speaking English with for…

英作文を添削してほしいです。 My goal is speaking English with for…

英作文を添削してほしいです。 My goal is speaking English with foreign country people and having a TOEIC test
score over 800
I want to speak English well for two reasons
Firstly, I am an official servant and work as a nurse in a hospital
My work is consultant about the social welfare system
I often communicate with foreign country’s patients on my work
They are so nervous, so they can’t speak Japanese well and
they don’t know about the social welfare system
If I fluently speak English, I would be a bridge between patients and medical workers
Secondly, I like traveling foreign country
I went to Taiwan last March I was so fun!
There are many countries where I want to go
For example, Russia and Italy, French, America and so on
My work is so busy every day, but I want to study English

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【添削】
My goal IN LEARNING English IS TO SPEAK with PEOPLE FROM
foreign countrIES and SCORING over 800 from a TOEIC test
I want to speak English well for two reasons, ONE FOR MY
WORK, AND THE OTHER FOR MY OWN SAKE
I am A PUBLIC SERVANT, WORKING as a nurse AT a hospital
I AM A social welfare system CONSULTANT I often
communicate with patients FROM FOREIGN COUNTRIES on
my JOB They can’t speak Japanese well, SO they are VERY
nervous They don’t know A LOT about JAPAN’S social welfare
system If I COULD fluently speak English, I would be ABLE TO
BE a bridge between THE patients and medical workers
I like traveling IN foreign countrIES LAST MARCH, I went to
Taiwan I HAD A GREAT TIME THERE There are many countries
THAT I WANT TO VISIT, Russia, Italy, FRANCE, THE USA, and
so on
I AM VERY busy every day AT WORK, but I want to study
English
・・・
水をさすようになるのは分かっている上で一言。
作文の練習をするのはしばらくおやめになった方がいいです。
このまま続けると、間違いが焼き付いてしまいます。
まず初心にもどり、英文を大量に読む、ということをなさって
みては? インプットを増やさないとアウトプットはできません。
なお、先に書いた英文はあくまで添削であり、その言い方が
もっともよい、という意味ではありません。
◆>My goal is
=My goal of English learning is
>speaking English with foreign country people
=speaking English with peoples of English speaking countries
=この peoples の、複数形に注意。
>and having a TOEIC test score over 800
=and having TOEIC score 800 or more
>I want to speak English well for two reasons
=I want to speak English fluently, with two main reasons
>Firstly,
=First,
>I am an official servant and work as a nurse in a hospital
=I work for city counsel as a nurse in a local hospital
>My work is consultant about the social welfare system
=I work as a consultant on the social welfare system
>I often communicate with foreign country’s patients on my work
=I often talk to non-Japanese patients as a part of my work
>They are so nervous, so they can’t speak Japanese well and
=They are sometimes nervous, as they can not explain their problems
in Japanese well,
>they don’t know about the social welfare system
=without having knowledge of Japanese social welfare system
>If I fluently speak English,
=Consequently, if I could speak English fluently,
>I would be a bridge between patients and medical workers
=I could be myself a bridge between foreign patients and medical =administrations
>Secondly, I like traveling foreign country
=Secondly, I like traveling in foreign countries
>I went to Taiwan last March
=I visited Taiwan last March
>I was so fun!
=It was such fun, then it pleased me a lot
>There are many countries where I want to go
=Still, there are lots of countries I want to visit
>For example, Russia and Italy, French, America and so on
=For example, Russia, Italy, France, America and many more
>My work is so busy every day, but I want to study English
=I work so hard every day, but I want to find some times to study
=English much more
評・まあまあ。
基礎がしっかりしていないし、SVO の意味がわかっていない。
でも、1~2年、勉強すれば、高校英語レベルには、なるでしょう。
よければ、このカテで、月1で添削しますよ。
◆My goal is to be able to communicate in English with foreigners, and to get TOEIC scores over 800
I want to speak English well for the following two reasons
First, I work as a nurse at a public hospital and often need to talk at work with patients from foreing countries Most of them don’t speak Japanese well and are nervous when talking with us Besides, they are not familiar with the Japanese social welfare system So I want to help those people If I can speak English better, I would be able to help those patients communicate with our medical staff
Secondly, I like traveling in foreign countries
I went to Taiwan last March It was so fun!
There are many other countries I want to go to
For example, Russia, Italy, France, America and so on
Now I am busy with my work every day, but I want to find time to improve my English
I am happy rewriting your English I wish you all the best
◆I’m aspiring to be able to speak English well and get over 800 of score in TOEIC
I have two reasons why I’m eager to speak English
Firstly, I’m working at a public hospital as a nurse to tell about the social welfare system to patients whoever visit, so It’s often to see foreign people
And when I see the people, they seem struggling to manage their medical situation at the hospital because they aren’t good enough in Japanese
If I can talk to them in English, I can be a helpful staff for both patients and doctors
Secondly, I have a lot of countries where I want to visit such as Russia, Italy, France and the US
That’s the good reason to keep myself motivated for studying it, even though
I can’t spare enough time
◆I was so fun→It was so fun
◆ひとつだけ
Foreign countries よりは Other countriesのほうがいいですし、
旅行に行くのなら、other culturesに触れる、のほうが
いいと思います。
それ以外はご自分の言葉なので、とてもよく伝わります!
頑張ってください!


質問タグ:I was so fun,For example,score over 800,Secondly,It was so fun,英作文,It was such fun

【PS4】この文章伝わりますか? 気になる人がいましたが、もう会うのは止めよ…

この文章伝わりますか? 気になる人がいましたが、もう会うのは止めよ…

この文章伝わりますか?
気になる人がいましたが、もう会うのは止めようと決めたので、最後に伝えようと思って書きました。
I’ve thought about it,I think I want to stop see you any more
I liked you, but I know you don’t like me
My heart aches after the bye with youBut it’s okay now
I want to know your ture feeling about meDon’t beat around the bust!
相手の名前,I’m so glad to have met you
Thank you

アンサー

微妙な文法間違いはありますが、十分にあなたの意思は伝わります。いい文章ですよ。
ただ、beat around the bush です。bust じゃなくて。
◆伝わるよ


質問タグ:I liked you,Thank you,文章,相手,名前,文法,Bust

【コスパ最強】ナルト疾風伝でナルトが結婚するって分かったのって、494話で初めてで…

ナルト疾風伝でナルトが結婚するって分かったのって、494話で初めてで…

ナルト疾風伝でナルトが結婚するって分かったのって、494話で初めてですか?
494話見てて、急に結婚お祝いのビデオレターで始まって、唐突で驚いたので。

アンサー

TVシリーズだけ見てるとそうなりますが、494話の前に映画の「THE LAST -NARUTO THE MOVIE-」が入ります。
「THE LAST」は第四次忍界大戦から2年後の話で、こちらでナルトとヒナタの結婚までの経緯が描かれています。
この映画はTVシリーズ390話の時点で公開されているので、アニメ製作サイドも視聴者は「THE LAST」を既に見ているものとしてTVシリーズを進めています。
◆なるほど、どうりで。
ありがとうございました


質問タグ:ナルト疾風伝,ビデオレター,THE LAST,結婚お祝い,第四次忍界大戦,ヒナタ,ナルト

【驚愕】面白いアニメある? オーバーロードみたいな異世界転生もの好きなんだが

面白いアニメある? オーバーロードみたいな異世界転生もの好きなんだが

面白いアニメある? オーバーロードみたいな異世界転生もの好きなんだが

アンサー

ワンパンマンって知ってますか?
ギャグ系なんですけど主人公最強ですよ!


質問タグ:オーバーロード,異世界転生,ワンパンマン,面白いアニメ,主人公最強,ギャグ系

【ネット】EXOスホの好きな女の子のタイプ教えてください レイとクリスは目の綺…

EXOスホの好きな女の子のタイプ教えてください レイとクリスは目の綺…

EXOスホの好きな女の子のタイプ教えてください レイとクリスは目の綺麗な子だけどしゅほは??

アンサー

デビュー超際長いストレート髪に読書が好きな文学少女としたが、今では笑
最近では、理想が何であるかは知らない!
誰も知らない?
EXOメンバーだけわかるでしょ!
◆今では変わってるかもしれませんね!
本人にしか分からないかも。笑
けどレイの好きな異性のタイプが
わたしは一番好きかも!!です
◆スホはルハンが女装した時の顔がタイプです。


質問タグ:しゅほ,EXOスホ,クリス,レイ,女の子,ルハン,スホ

【厳選】下の画像のキャラわかる方教えてくださいm(_ _)m

下の画像のキャラわかる方教えてくださいm(_ _)m

下の画像のキャラわかる方教えてくださいm(_ _)m

キャラわかる方,ユーリ,on ICE,ユーリ・プリセツキー,画像,二次創作イラスト,mアンサー

パッと見た感じだと
■キャラ名
ユーリ・プリセツキー
■作品名
「ユーリ!!!on ICE」
の二次創作イラストかな?


質問タグ:キャラわかる方,ユーリ,on ICE,ユーリ・プリセツキー,画像,二次創作イラスト,m

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